Author Katie
Alender
Delia was a
fifteen-year-old girl. Who had a sister
named Janie who did annoy her a lot but deep down she did lover her. Her and her family were moving to a new house
but it wasn’t any ordinary house there was lots of history behind this
house.
The first
couple of nights Delia was noticing some strange things that were
happening. She tried to warn her family that
it wasn’t any good for them to stay in the house but her family didn’t believe
her. Until the next day her family found
her died outside of her bed room window which was located on the third floor.
The strange
part was she could still see her family and everything around her, but her
family couldn’t see her. That’s when she
realized she was a ghost. After the
accident her family decided to move out.
She tried to get into the car so she could leave with her family but it
was impossible because for some odd reason the house didn’t want her to
leave.
Her family
ended up leaving without her meanwhile there was many other ghost wandering the
halls in their old fashion night gowns.
Delia needed to think of a way to escape the house fast before the house
takes over her and everything she loves.
Find out
what happens to Delia next while being trapped in the house and if she will
ever see her family again.
By Jessica
Pretula
Star: I like how you described the setting
ReplyDeleteStar: I also liked your word choices
Wish: I wish you had a hook, that would be awesome.
By: preet
I like your cliff hanger.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this write.
I wish you had more of a hook and fix your grammar.
By: Brandon(:
I like how you have a cliffhanger it makes you want to read more.
ReplyDeleteI like how you introduced the main character and her family and what was happening.
I wish that you make some sort of hook in the beginning.
By Nadia
I liked how you described the character, also how you created suspense and had in limit. I wish you had wrote a hook.by kamaldeep
ReplyDeletei like how you introduced the main character
ReplyDeletei like you cliff hanger
i wish you would have wrote more of a hook
-Brianna:)
I like how you explained the story.
ReplyDeleteI liked the cliff hanger.
I wish you had a better hook and you fixed some of you grammar.
By: bernard
Star: I like that you described the setting in detail.
ReplyDeleteStar: I like how you left a cliff hanger
Wish: I wish you would've wrote more about the main character.
By: Emily 8B
I like the suspense, kind of spooky.
ReplyDeleteThe hook could be better.
I wish you had a hook. It would make this review better.
Josiah